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Character-Based Plot: Not Easy But So Effective Article About Writing Better

Monday, May 15th, 2017
William H. Coles


Showing story and character in action-scenes with concrete imagery, supportive narration, and dynamic prose enriches display of character emotion, morality, desire, history, and worldview… all with pleasurable, enlightening, and lasting effects on readers. Of course, narrative telling is important–it can be more figurative, abstract, and metaphorical–but for intensity and impact, in-scene action is often the better choice to develop character with story.

The first example tells of a happening. There is no action or significant characterization:

Harry flew a kite at the beach to entertain his invalid son but the kite got away, and Harry seethed with anger.

Here is the same event shows in-scene action that helps develop character:

A wind gust elevated the dragon kite and the string ran through Harry’s hand fast enough to hurt.
“Let me do it, Daddy,” his son Raymond said as he limped to Harry’s side. The boy held out his hand that, when awake, trembled nonstop from a congenital palsy. Could he hold the string? Fly the kite? He wanted to so badly.
“Hold tight,” Harry urged placing the string in the boy’s hand. The kite dipped then suddenly soared, the string taught again.
The boy cried out. “I dropped it.” Harry reached out but the kite had ascended too far to grab the trailing string.
The untethered kite disappeared, driven out to the sea by a gusty off-shore wind.
“I didn’t mean too,” the boy said, “Please don’t hit me.”


Historically, great literary fictional characters reveal the complexities of being human through memorable, riveting, thought-provoking characterization that lasts in the collective human consciousness for generations.

A major element of creating a great character is CHARACTER-BASED PLOT where a character's thoughts, feelings, and actions are often integral to logical plot-progression rather than a character simply reacting to fatalistic or serendipitous plot events.


A. Character reacting to plot events:

1) Fatalism.
Pablo spotted the meteorite as it plunged through the atmosphere and he unsuccessfully ran for his life.

2) Serendipity.
Homeless Willy was starved and he walked the streets for a handout when he came across a ham and cheese sandwich wrapped in cellophane lying on the sidewalk.

B. Character-motivated plot progression.

Mary, fed up with her lying abusive husband, drove with her children to live with her mother in Canada and when she came to the mile-long narrows suspension-bridge her life-long fear of heights made her ignore a “road closed” sign and she detoured onto a wintery road in an attempt to reach the ferry. The car skidded on black ice plunging over a cliff killing all.

In essence, a meteorite kills the man (fatalistic), a hungry man finds food (serendipity), a mother’s fears and distress kill her and her family (character-based plot).


Gustave Flaubert has a scene in Madame Bovary that uses character-based plot development with both in-scene and narrator perspective to show character individuality and complexity. The basic plot is: Emma Bovary convinced her husband, Charles, she needed piano lessons as a ruse to meet her lover in town . . . and, after a few weeks, everyone thought her piano playing improved.

From Madame Bovary–part three, chapter four (text abbreviated).

One evening when Charles was listening to her, she began the same piece four times over, each time with much vexation, while he, not noticing any difference, cried– “Bravo! Very good! You are wrong to stop. Go on!”
“Oh, no; it is execrable! My fingers are quite rusty.”
The next day he begged her to play him something again.
“Very well; to please you!”
And Charles confessed she had gone off a little. She played wrong notes and blundered; then, stopping short–
“Ah! it is no use. I ought to take some lessons; but–” She bit her lips and added, “Twenty francs a lesson, that’s too dear!”
“Yes, so it is–rather,” said Charles, giggling stupidly. “But it seems to me that one might be able to do it for less; for there are artists of no reputation, and who are often better than the celebrities.”
“Find them!” said Emma.
The next day when he came home he looked at her shyly.
“Madame Liegard assured me that her three young ladies who are at La Misericorde have lessons at fifty sous apiece!”
[Emma} shrugged her shoulders and did not open her piano again. But when she passed by it (if Bovary were there), she sighed– “Ah! my poor piano!”
And when anyone came to see her, she did not fail to inform them she had given up music, and could not begin again now for important reasons. Then people commiserated her– “What a pity! she had so much talent!” They even spoke to Bovary about it. They put him to shame, and especially the chemist.

“You are wrong [. . . ] my good friend [. . .] by inducing madame (Emma) to study; you [would be] economizing on the subsequent musical education of your child.”
So Charles returned once more to this question of the piano. Emma replied bitterly that it would be better to sell it. This poor piano that had given her vanity so much satisfaction–to see it go was to Bovary like the indefinable suicide of a part of herself.
“If you liked,” he said, “a lesson from time to time, that wouldn’t after all be very ruinous.”
“But lessons,” she replied, “are only of use when followed up.”
And thus it was she set about obtaining her husband’s permission to go to town once a week to see her lover. At the end of a month she was even considered to have made considerable progress.

FUNDAMENTAL IDEA: The plot progresses revealing Emma’s deceitful clever, selfish, unscrupulous behavior and Charles’s doting, clueless, naive, yet caring nature, adds to the composition of unique, lasting, memorable literary characters.

READ COMPLETE ESSAY ON CHARACTERIZATION HERE: Techniques for Excellence in Creating Character in Literary Fiction: Action, Conflict, Character-based Plots, Change, Dialogue, Setting

EXPLORE OTHER ESSAYS on creating literary fiction here: Essays on Writing

READ award-winning novel, THE SPIRIT OF WANT as a prime example of character-based story where a character's intellect, drive, and capabilities bring her to a point of great potential as a lawyer and a woman but her selfish needs and indifference to others drive the main plot and subplots that lead to tragic consequences for all who know and care.

The Spirit Of Want

Cover illustration for the novel The Spirit of Want by William H. Coles. Illustration by Betty Harper

How Writers “Murder Their Darlings” (and stay out of prison) Article About Writing Better

Monday, May 1st, 2017
William H. Coles

Creative-writing students are sometimes advised to “murder your darlings,” usually in a glib, demeaning way by a teacher or critic. The concept has major importance for a successful writer and it’s sad that the phrase has a cutesy-clever quality that causes it's value often to be discounted and ignored. Here are a few thoughts.

“Darlings” are felt by the proud writer to be clever, erudite, intellectually unique pieces of writing that to most readers may be excessive, illogical, overwritten, distracting, and often irritating. In essence, a “darling” is assumed to be acceptable, even great, by the author but not by most readers. It can be subtle and it occurs when the writer is unconsciously trying to impress the reader with his or her talent and aptitude rather than focusing on creating readable, enjoyable, and informative prose.

“Darlings” are not easy to find in one’s work. The trick is, as an author, to predict in readers what they might consider as poor writing, and to delete or change. Of course, when authors write, they’re not trying to create “darlings.” To discover “darlings,” writers must assume they might be present and be willing to look for them by: 1) avoiding baseless admiration for their creations and maintaining appropriate modesty for their talent, 2) revising their works with objectivity and with a knowledgeable critical appraisal of what they’ve written.

Here are some examples that represent categories of writing that a writer might use as a guide to “darling” hunting when revising his or her work.

1. NON SEQUITUR [Something that does not follow logically what comes before.]
—His faith is important to him and he believes passionately in the gospel and the resurrection of Jesus Christ, and you know, the whole concept of running up and down a court to throw a bloated ball through a metal ring would be, to him, a reprehensible opprobrious waste of energy.
—“. . . we’re huddled beneath a blue tarp next to the midden, sipping coffee and ingesting some terrestrial chemical elements in the form of cookies.” [Smithsonian, March 2017, pg. 32]
3. HYPERBOLE [Exaggerated statements or claims.]
—The food was fantastic, chock full of bursting flavors with a scrumptious lingering aftertaste to please the gods.
4. CLICHÉ [Element of an artistic work which has become overused to the point of losing its original meaning or effect, even to the point of being trite or irritating.]
—That is not my cup of tea.
—Everyone’s best interest.
—Two score and three years ago, I brought forth to this community, to this congregation, the glory that is God.
5. FLAWED METAPHOR [Metaphor: a thing symbolic or representative of something else so the comparison enhances interpretation and meaning.]
—That backhoe is a blooming iris. [No meaning. The items compared are too disparate.}
—She’s as graceful as a turtle on its back. (Could be consider sarcastic, but not successful metaphoric comparison.)
6. ERRANT DIALOGUE [Example exaggerated for emphasis.]
—“Last night I dreamt I heard a thousand, screaming, lost souls trapped in the fiery depths of hell for eternity,” the nurse said as she used tweezers to gently tease pus-embedded gauze from the charred skin on her patient’s back.
—reprehensible opprobrious waste of energy
—terrestrial chemical elements in the form of cookies
—mawkishly pseudo-intellectual quality

CONCLUSION: Potentially perceived bad writing, a highly variable judgment, can take many forms that writers need to identify; the above categories serve as common sources of error that can be used in revision as guidelines for objective analysis and recognition of unwanted missteps–"darlings."

William H. Coles.
Thanks for reading!

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